Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
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extreme
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the government
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extreme
sport
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sports
harmfull
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harmful
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perspectives
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strict
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regulations
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others
injuries. Correct quantifier usage
other
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extreme
sport
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sports
such
as bungi
jumping and motor cross should Correct your spelling
bungee
be encourage
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be encouraged
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kinds
sport
in order to minimalize any accident
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accidents
Thus
, any unwanted accident might be prevented by this
approach.
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extreme
sport
could be relate
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be related
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becomes
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the main
people
get engaged in it. Others also
do this
sport
to cure some desease
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diseases
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for those with Correct your spelling
specifically
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phobias
theraphy
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therapy
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result
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a practical
more
healthier. I believe, despite some Change the word
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phisical
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physical
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resulting
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also
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a postive
postive
side which is they can express themselves well.
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positive
To sum up
, Goverment
may put some Correct your spelling
government
regulation
in order to reduce any negative Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
effect
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effects
however
, people
are encouraged to do their favorite
activities as long as Change the spelling
favourite
it
have Correct pronoun usage
they
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benefits
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themselves
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