The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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Both charts give data regarding the comparison of household tasks done by
men
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and
women
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as well as
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how much
time
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they spend on them each day.
Overall
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, both charts indicated that cooking and cleaning are more popular for
women
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to do, and the
time
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they spent was
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higher than
men
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's.
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, based on the first chart, around 80% of
women
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usually cook every day and cleaning is slightly less, standing at over 60%,
while
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for
men
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, the percentage for these two tasks was lower than
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women
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by about 20%.
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, the house repairs category had the least proportion at about 10% for
women
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and 20% for
men
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. Accounting for 20%, both genders had almost the same figure. In terms of
time
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spending
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,
women
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do cooking and cleaning for approximately 80 and 60 minutes, respectively,
while
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men
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spent
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spend
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less
time
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by
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apply
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around 20% for each task. Pet care records
at
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were at
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20% which was the same for
men
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and
women
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, meanwhile, house repairs took the lowest amount of
time
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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