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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data on the average
population
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 and
wealth
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share
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 of eight different
regions
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.
Overall
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, the
share
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 of
wealth
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 is significantly higher in
regions
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such
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 as North America and Europe compared to India and Africa. Meanwhile, China has the highest
population
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 of all eight
regions
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; rich
Asia-Pacific
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,
on the other hand
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, has the lowest number of citizens in comparison to being the third highest in
wealth
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share
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. North America topped all other
regions
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 by around 34%
wealth
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share
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, followed by Europe and rich
Asia-Pacific
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, ranging from about 23% to 29%, respectively.
Whereas
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 the other five
regions
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 have relatively similar portions to each other, Latin America and the Caribbean, with approximately 4% of the
wealth
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share
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, is the highest among them. Africa and India both came in
last
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 with roughly 2%, respectively. In terms of
population
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, China leads with over 24%, despite having one of the lowest
wealth
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 shares at around 3%. Europe, India, and other
Asia-Pacific
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 were lower than China, whose proportions range from approximately 15% to 18% of the
population
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. Meanwhile, none of the other four
regions
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 reached over 10%,
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 it is important to note that
rich
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the rich
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Asia-pacific
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Asia-Pacific
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 has the lowest margin in
population
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 with about 5% as opposed to having one of the highest
wealth
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 shares.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, share, regions, asia-pacific with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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