The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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the distinction of beautiful cultural value, which were passed on
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some kind of art activities. The
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tourism industry. In conclusion, financial assistance for innovative artists is not merely an
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in preserving traditional cultural values but
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a means of generating foreign cash flow into the tourism industry and contributing significantly to the revenue of the film industry.
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, I strongly disagree with the notion that government
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in arts and culture is a waste of money. It represents an
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in a
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's identity, creativity, and economic prosperity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • public services
  • economic benefits
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • equitable access
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • prioritize
  • essential services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • tourism
  • global recognition
  • holistic development
  • mutually exclusive
  • philanthropy
  • subsidize
  • infrastructure
  • socio-economic status
  • altruistic
  • civic engagement
  • aesthetics
  • civic pride
  • utilitarian
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