The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004.

The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004.
The bar charts demonstrate the total of cosmetic surgeries that women and men had done on their bodies in Korea in the year 2004.
Overall
, it was more common for females to do cosmetic procedures and the most popular among the 5 given was eyelid surgery,
whereas
rhinoplasty obtained second place. Meanwhile, laser skin resurfacing was done quite frequently by males,
although
it was not as spread as hair transplantation. The
number
of ladies that had liposuction done was the smallest among other cosmetic enhancements, which accounted for approximately 120,000 cases, which was 2 times as many as the statistic of gentlemen that had hair transplantation. Simultaneously, there were similar patterns in terms of women who had rhinoplasty and eyelid surgery done, namely, about 280,000 and 300,000 incidents. There were analogical figures regarding the
number
of men that had an aesthetic treatment done, specifically, the
number
of surgery-type facelifts and abdominoplasties that were performed on male faces accounted for about 15,000 and 18,000 cases, respectively, which was almost one-tenth of the statistic of women that had laser skin resurfacing.
In addition
, the sum of men that had a rhinoplasty done constituted 40,000 cases, which was approximately one-sixth of the
number
of ladies in the same category of beauty procedure
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