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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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The
piechart
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 depicts
the
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information about the utilisation of
resourses
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resources
,
total
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a total
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 number of
people
live
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living
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 around the world and the consumption of
resourses
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resources
 as well.
Overall
, most of the
people
 spend
money
 on other activities but most of the
people
 live in Asia.Huge amount of
resourses
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resources
consumed
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from
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by
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U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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 and Europe as well. Looking at the chart in detail,
cosidering
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considering
people
 spend
money
 on various activities and that accounted for 40%.
Furthermore
,almost
aquarter
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a quarter
 of
money
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the money
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utilised
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 for
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the purchase
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purchase
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purchasing
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of foad
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foad
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food
 items.
People
 spend
money
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more money
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in
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on
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 housing than transport and that accounted
for12
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for 12
% and 18% respectively.
Moreover
above
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over
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 half of the
people
 lived in
asia
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Asia
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,but
equal
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an equal
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 number of
people
settle
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settled
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 in Europe and America and that accounted for 14%. Only 10% of
people
 live in Africa.Inaddtion
almost60
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almost
% of USA and
Europe
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European
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 citizens
cosumed
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consume
significant
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a significant
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 amount of
resourses
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resources
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resourses, people, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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