The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates that In 2010, the
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of males and females on 6 different
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scales did regular physical exercises. In terms of gender, the
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of women between the ages of 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 increases steadily (47.7 % , 48.9% , 52.5% and 53.3 % respectively ) and starts to decrease after the
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of 54.
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, in men, there is a regular decrease in
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between the ages of 15 to 24, 25 to 34, and 35 to 44, (52.8 % , 42.2% , 39.5% respectively)
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it starts to increase and continues regularly.
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, the number of women who did regular physical activity was higher than men. The only time scale in which males’
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was higher than females’ is 15 to 25 ages. (52,8% and 47,7% respectively) The highest
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belongs to females whose
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is between 45 to 54 ( 53.3%) and the lowest
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belongs to males whose
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is between 35 to 44 ( 39.5%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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