The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.
The pie charts below
illustrates
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the number of electricity generated by
energy
source in Scotland for
couple
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of decades
years
ago and
last
year.
Overall
, 20
years
ago the highest percentage of
energy
was generated by Coal and the lowest one was Oil.
However
, in the
last
year
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Hydro pumped storage
was
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generated the lowest amount of
energy
,
whether
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Coal generated the highest number of
energy
so far. 20
years
ago Nuclear was generated
the
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19.6% of
energy
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the energy
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in Scotland and in the
last
year
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it
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to 26.4%, which is more increased in comparison to other types of
energy
. Whether
,
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Hydro natural flow
was
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produced 8.7% of
energy
and after 20
years
it
is
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produced 7.9% of
energy
which almost hasn't changed. In conclusion, even after
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20
years
government still produced most of
energy
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by using coal.
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