The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.
The pie charts below
illustrates
the number of electricity generated by Change the verb form
illustrate
energy
source in Scotland for couple
of decades Change the article
a couple
years
ago and last
year.
Overall
, 20 years
ago the highest percentage of energy
was generated by Coal and the lowest one was Oil. However
, in the last
year
Hydro pumped storage Add a comma
,year
was
generated the lowest amount of Unnecessary verb
apply
energy
, whether
Coal generated the highest number of Correct word choice
while
energy
so far.
20 years
ago Nuclear was generated the
19.6% of Correct article usage
apply
energy
in Scotland and in the Correct article usage
the energy
last
year
it Add a comma
,year
is increases
to 26.4%, which is more increased in comparison to other types of Change the verb form
is increased
is increasing
energy
. Whether,
Hydro natural flow Remove the comma
apply
was
produced 8.7% of Unnecessary verb
apply
energy
and after 20 years
it is
produced 7.9% of Unnecessary verb
apply
energy
which almost hasn't changed.
In conclusion, even after the
20 Correct article usage
apply
years
government still produced most of energy
by using coal.Correct pronoun usage
its energy
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