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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The picture depicts information about how liquid chocolate is produced from the cocoa trees which are grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia.
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, there are ten stages in the process, beginning with collecting ripe red pods from cocoa trees and ending with pressing the inner parts of the
beans
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 to get liquid chocolate.
To begin
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 with, once pods get ripe and red, they are harvested and got white cocoa
beans
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 from these pods.
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 the white
beans
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 are fermented.
After
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this
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 step, the
beans
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 spread in the sun to dry.
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, the quantity of the dried
beans
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 is put into the large sacks to transport.
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 they are transported by using trains or lorries to the factory. Moving to the factory, as is seen in the given picture, the
beans
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 are roasted using an oven.
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, they are roasted up to 350 celcius degrees in the oven. After that, the
beans
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 are crushed and in
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 stage, the outer shells of the
beans
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 are removed.
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, the inner parts of the
beans
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 are pressed to get liquid chocolate.
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