The pie charts below show the amount of electricity by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.
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pie charts demonstrate the amount of electricity,
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produced by energy in Scotland
last
year and 20 years later.
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, the first table showed types of energy, where coal (approximately 41.4%) was
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trait, but not more important was hydro pumped storage with three
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twenty years ago. The second Tae
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, that the same amount of coal was consumed to generate
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electricity in Scotland, in the same
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raw material with
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percentage was at
hydro pumped
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storage
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%. Twenty years ago, gas 22.3% was used after coal, but oil two
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of one
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had been used to generate
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light,
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last
year
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percentages and types were belong to gas and oil.
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, nuclear 19.6% and other renewables rose
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than others. In general,
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rates demonstrated significant altering percentages in
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20 and 1 year. But vivid rates illustrated by
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materials coal and gas in both of charts.
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