The pie charts below show the amount of electricity by energy source in Scotland for 20 years ago and last year.
The both
Correct article usage
Both
of
pie charts demonstrate the amount of electricity, Change preposition
apply
which
produced by energy in Scotland Correct pronoun usage
apply
last
year and 20 years later.
Overall
, the first table showed types of energy, where coal (approximately 41.4%) was main
trait, but not more important was hydro pumped storage with three Correct article usage
the main
point
of one Change to a plural noun
points
percent
twenty years ago. The second Tae Change the spelling
per cent
shown
, that the same amount of coal was consumed to generate Wrong verb form
shows
an
electricity in Scotland, in the same Remove the article
apply
way
raw material with Add the comma(s)
,way
small
percentage was at Correct article usage
a small
hydro pumped
storage Add a hyphen
hydro-pumped
2.2
%.
Twenty years ago, gas 22.3% was used after coal, but oil two Change preposition
at 2.2
point
of one Change to a plural noun
points
percent
had been used to generate Change the spelling
per cent
a
light, Remove the article
apply
besides
last
year similarly
percentages and types were belong to gas and oil. Although
, nuclear 19.6% and other renewables rose rapidly
than others.
In general, Correct quantifier usage
more rapidly
this
rates demonstrated significant altering percentages in Correct determiner usage
these
last
20 and 1 year. But vivid rates illustrated by Correct article usage
the last
combine
materials coal and gas in both of charts.Replace the word
combined
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