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**The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.**

**The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.**
The bar graph illustrates the amount of outlay and outcome of US citizens by different age groups in 2013.
Overall
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middle age
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 groups had the biggest proportion of
earning
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earnings
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 and spending,
moreover
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 income
valeus
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values
generally
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 higher than expenditures for all age categories. The group of below-25-year-old citizens had just below 30000
dollars
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 value income which was slightly lower than their outcome.
However
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, the elderly who were older than 75 years old had roughly equal revenues and expenditures which was around 35000
dollars
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. The remaining populations had quite similar patterns 35-
44 year-old
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44-year-old
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 and 45-
54 year-old
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54-year-old
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 people had the biggest income with below 80-thousand
dollars
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,
on the other hand
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second
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the second
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 group of people's spending
slightly
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was slightly
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 higher which was more than
60-thousand
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60 thousand
dollars
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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