The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.

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The bar graph illustrates the amount of outlay and outcome of US citizens by different age groups in 2013.

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middle age

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groups had the biggest proportion of

earning

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and spending,

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income

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values

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higher than expenditures for all age categories. The group of below-25-year-old citizens had just below 30000

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value income which was slightly lower than their outcome.

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, the elderly who were older than 75 years old had roughly equal revenues and expenditures which was around 35000

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. The remaining populations had quite similar patterns 35-

44 year-old

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and 45-

54 year-old

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people had the biggest income with below 80-thousand

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on the other hand

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second

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group of people's spending

slightly

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higher which was more than

60-thousand

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60 thousand

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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120 words

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**The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.**

Some people think government should ban dangerous sports; others, however, believe that people should be free to do whatever they choose. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the last decade, there has been a great increase in international travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think is a positive or a negative development?

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Disucss both these view and give your own opinions.

The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.