You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

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see you. I planning to visit your city in the next few months and
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wonder if I could meet you
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haven't seen you , you know that
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love my field of network engineering,
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did some courses related to
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have been working with a large service provider company and
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depend on me. and they want to increase my experience and knowledge.
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some other training courses that are located in your city. as
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mentioned before ,
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haven't seen you for a
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hope to spend
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would like to enjoy my
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a result, in the next few
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will travel to
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wish to meet you there, and have
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. best wishes Jack
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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