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The bar graph below depicts the percentage of families in owned and rented houses in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The bar graph below depicts the percentage of families in owned and rented houses in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The bar graph below depicts the percentage of families in owned and rented houses in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. It can be clearly seen from the chart that the
most
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highest figure
in
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 rented accommodation was in 1918,
there
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had
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reached almost 80%.
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, in the same
year
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 the lowest rate in owned spaces could pass
the
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liitle
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little
 more than 20%.
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, in 1939 and 1953 there
were
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 a
totaly
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totally
total
 equal percentage for both indicators. There was
a
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approximately 69% in room rental and more than 30%, who had their own
appartments
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apartments
.
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, as many people in 1991 as households in 2001 chose to
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 spaces.
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, there were almost
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 same number of habitants, who
prefered
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preferred
 leasing residences. In
generaly
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general
, we can see from the data that in the past considerably more people lived in
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rented accommodations,
however
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, citizens in owned houses rose gradually, and the trend was upward.

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