The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.

The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.
The diagrams
depicts
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depict
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the various stages
in
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apply
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producing of chocolate. First of all, the cacao tree with ripe red pods is grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. After the pods are harvested,
a
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white cocoa
beans
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are extracted from the pods. The cocoa
beans
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are
then
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fermented, spread in
sun
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the sun
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to dry and put in
the
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large sacks. After that, it is carried by train or lorry to the factory, where the
beans
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are roasted at 350 C. The
beans
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are
then
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crushed in
mixer
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a mixer
the mixer
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to remove
outer
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the outer
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shell.
And
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Finally
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finally
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, the inner part of
cocoa
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the cocoa
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bean is pressed and turned into
chocolate
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a chocolate
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liquid.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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