The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.

The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.
The diagrams
depicts
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the various stages
in
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producing of chocolate. First of all, the cacao tree with ripe red pods is grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. After the pods are harvested,
a
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white cocoa
beans
are extracted from the pods. The cocoa
beans
are
then
fermented, spread in
sun
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to dry and put in
the
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large sacks. After that, it is carried by train or lorry to the factory, where the
beans
are roasted at 350 C. The
beans
are
then
crushed in
mixer
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to remove
outer
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shell.
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finally
, the inner part of
cocoa
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the cocoa
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bean is pressed and turned into
chocolate
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a chocolate
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liquid.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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