The diagrams depicts the various stages in producing of chocolate.
The diagrams
depicts
the various stages Change the verb form
depict
in
producing of chocolate.
First of all, the cacao tree with ripe red pods is grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. After the pods are harvested, Change preposition
apply
a
white cocoa Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
beans
are extracted from the pods. The cocoa beans
are then
fermented, spread in sun
to dry and put in Correct article usage
the sun
the
large sacks. After that, it is carried by train or lorry to the factory, where the Correct article usage
apply
beans
are roasted at 350 C. The beans
are then
crushed in mixer
to remove Add an article
a mixer
the mixer
outer
shell. Add an article
the outer
And
Correct word choice
Finally
finally
, the inner part of cocoa
bean is pressed and turned into Correct article usage
the cocoa
chocolate
liquid.Correct article usage
a chocolate
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