The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.
The two given picture show the layout of the Islip town centre at present and
also
shows its future construction plan.
Overall
, it can be seen that major changes will take place
according to
the plan. currently, the north part of the town consists of the countryside and the south part has housing facilities. In the middle of the center is the main pathway which has two divisions one leads to the school and the other on the southeast leads to the park. Either side of the main road incorporates the shops.
However
, enormous changes have been planned for the future town centre. Only the position of the park, school and shops towards the south will remain the same. The main driveway will be replaced by a dual-carriageway. towards the, north the shops and housing will
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over by the bus station, shopping centre car park, and new housing facilities towards the northeast side. In the
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middle the road for pedestrians will be constructed.
Moreover
, housing will be shifted towards the west and southeast area and some new housing will be placed in the east part.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrianization
  • relocation
  • sustainability
  • urban planning
  • land use
  • green spaces
  • civic amenities
  • public transport options
  • commute
  • zoning
  • traffic congestion
  • redevelopment
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