The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.

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, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the

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but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated. Prices for all

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metals dipped in June. In January the price of nickel was up

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dropped to negative

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in June, ending the year with a one

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increase in both November and December. Copper began the year with an increase of two

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and by May, the price was dropping (by slightly less than one per cent). It rose again, increasing by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with

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per cent and the price fell in June (a one

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decrease). The change, was negative until October/November when it began to rise.

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average monthly change
prices of metals
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fluctuation
increase
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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that advertising is a major factor in driving consumer demand. Others believe that consumers are becoming more immune to advertising. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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