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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide the percentage of using
water
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 for different purposes in six areas around the world.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the given information, Europe is the country
uses
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that uses
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water
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 most in
industrial
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the industrial
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 field, it takes 53%.
About
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Regarding
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 agricultural use, Central
Asia
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 has the largest proportion of
water
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, accounting for 88%. And South America is the country
uses
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that uses
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water
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 for domestic
filed
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fields
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 most, it takes 19%. First of all, there are four countries
have
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that have
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the
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a
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 large percentage of using
water
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 for
agricultural
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the agricultural
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field
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fields
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, they occupy more than 50%. They are South America, South East
Asia
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, Africa,
Central
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and Central
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Asia
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, 71%, 81%, 84% and 88% respectively.
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, all of these six areas have less than 20% of domestic use. South America has the largest proportion in
this
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 field which is 19% and Central
Asia
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 has the least apply same as South East
Asia
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 (7%).
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, in South East
Asia
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, 12% of
water
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 is utilized for industrial uses,
while
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 in Africa and Central
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Asia
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,Asia
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 only 7% and 5% of
water
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 are put to use for industrial purposes.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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