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YOU SHOULD SPEND ABOUT 20 MINUTES ON THIS TASK THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES IN FOOD CONSUMPTION BY CHINESE PEOPLE BETWEEN 1985 AND 2010 SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT. WRITE AT LEAST 150 WORDS.

YOU SHOULD SPEND ABOUT 20 MINUTES ON THIS TASK THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES IN FOOD CONSUMPTION BY CHINESE PEOPLE BETWEEN 1985 AND 2010 SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT. WRITE AT LEAST 150 WORDS.
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The graph provides information about the number of food
consumption
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consumed
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 by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. As can be seen from the graph, there were different trends for the
consumption
 of
meat
, call and fish. The number of
meat
consumption
 increased rapidly from 1985 to 2010, from about 100 to 200
grams
/
person
/
weeks
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week
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.
Same
Correct article usage
The same
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 as
meat
 has a similarity because it started increasing quickly from 1985 to 1990 with 600 to 700
grams
/
person
/
weeks
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week
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,
then
 decreased a bit in 1995 with 600
grams
/
person
/week, and fluctuated wildly in one decade. Another type of food
consumption
 is salt
has
Verb problem
which is
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 a little bit different
with
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from
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meat
 and fish
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 immediately
in
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from
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beginning
Correct article usage
the beginning
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1985
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of 1985
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 to the end
2010
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of 2010
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 with total
Consumption
 from 500 to 100
grams
/
person
/week.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in the number of
meat
 and fish
consumption
 than salt
consumption
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, meat, grams, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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