some people work for the same organisation all their working life. others think that it is better to work for different organisations. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

For a long time having a job in the same organisation for all your working life, was the mainstream, in ,fact people believed that only sticking to the same company all along would allow you to make a career. In recent times,
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the younger working class tends more often to switch jobs in order to acquire diverse knowledge in the same work field. The latter opinion guarantees to master all different facets of the similar business position offered by various companies. Not only you can learn for your own progress, but
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determine which aspect of the position suits you the best and pursue it.
, personal growth allows you to become a valuable individual who tends to be more paid and required rather than others who do appreciate
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stability. The first opinion
, ensures the continuity of a career for the purpose of achieving
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and promotions.
, sticking to the same organisation guarantees stability, which would be significant for the certainty of having weekends off to start or manage a family. Other than the working benefits, sticking to the same company for a lifetime is
an opportunity to develop a professional profile but
loyalty to your profession and your colleagues. After analysing both theories I can assume that people who prefer to work for the same organisation are more likely to do so if they want to build a family of their own and concentrate on professional growth, since personal growth is achieved
in your everyday life.
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