Many People today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due ti new streaming services. to What extend do agree or disagree?

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everyone has mini
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the trend
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of
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decade. People's
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opinion
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to
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becoming irrelevant
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new streaming services or not. I disagree with
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above statement. In the upcoming
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the points to support
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opinion
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explained.
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, it is agreed to some
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the newer generation is
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dependent
more on streamlined services in comparison to the big
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it still not be able to replace the
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theatres
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. Because the environment and enjoyment provided by
cinemas
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can't be replaced by any
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other things
.the movie in the ambience of
cinemas
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is more effective.
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seems like every scene of
movie
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the movie
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happening in front of our eyes.
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done
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an advancement by
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introducing
3-D movie shows.
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, the
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scripts
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of
movies
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in the
cinemas
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high budgeted in comparison to the streamlined
movies
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which are average or sometimes low budgeted.
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,
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movies
in
cinemas
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are much
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better
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, the
movies
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in
cinemas
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different
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curiosity
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from the results that most of the
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are box office out of which 75% of the crowd is of youngsters.
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the trend of
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cannot be obsolete with the
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streamlined service because of its different stories and ambience of the theater etc.
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