The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015.

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015.
The
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line graph
illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of
households
with electronic devices from 1995 to 2015.
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,
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mobile
phone
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phones
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and
computer
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computers
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reached
to
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the top of the
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as
households
with
electronics
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devices tallest. And lower is mp3 player and tablet In 1995 the number of
mp3
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MP3
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player
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players
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was start
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below 20%, over 20 years the
percent
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of
households
fall
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over
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40% in 2015.
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start
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at 0% and
reach
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the highest point of over 80% in 2015. At the same time, the mobile
phone
and computer
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two percentage
households
tallest in 1995 to 2015, the mobile
phone
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1995 to 2000 started at 8% increase
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gradually
about 70% electronic devices and
reach
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a peak at over 90% and hit
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the
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top spot. The computer
also
start
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at 8% and
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increases
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steadily over the 20-year period. In 2015, it peaked at 90%, which is equal to mobile
phone
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phones
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, phone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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