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Many people believe that it's better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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Learning in groups is the best way believed by
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 extent.The reason for
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 after hearing different
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 in a discussion. Not only
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 section of individuals who likes to learn
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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