We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

The growth of
technology
in recent years has been remarkable. Our reliance on computers and other electronic gadgets grows every year.
This
raises underlying concerns about what uses they will have in the future and whether or not
this
dependency is concerning.
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, tracing all the new projects
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progress
during
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the world about
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technology
like ChatGPT is a sign
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what extent
this
field will have an influence on our future.
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the future without
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technology
is impossible. Even though computers are used in many fields, it is anticipated that new advancements can greatly alter
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will come to help surgeons to perform delicate surgeries. Education is another sector in which there will be a major impact.
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of artificial
technology
will have evolved the teaching curriculum.
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concerns
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whether or not technological dependence is beneficial. In my point
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, using new
technology
is similar to Walking on an invisible tightrope.
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the one hand, if you don’t involve yourself in
this
field, you won’t progress in society.
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can disrupt your presence in real life. The ability of modern machines to calculate different estimates and carry out complex assignments
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leads
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people to the point of losing their
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. The other significant problem which has
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bond with e-commerce is the activities of hackers and cybercriminals to hijack essential accounts and defraud money from people. In spite of the downsides of new technologies, we
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close our eyes to the benefits of
this
field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
  • E-waste
  • Carbon Footprint
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