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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Some
people
 believe that the best method to resolve growing traffic and pollution
problems
 is raising the
cost
 of
petrol
. I disagree with
this
 opinion and consider that
this
 solution is not quite effective,
otherwise
, it would bring many other
problems
 for citizens. Nowadays, private vehicles are more and more dramatically common, it is accompanied by pollution
problems
. But the
cost
 of
petrol
 rises, which isn't a good method. Vietnam
also
 applied
this
 solution with automobile tax but the number of
people
 driving by cars still rapidly increasing, perhaps using it with private vehicles would be the same.
Moreover
,
this
 solution may raise many issues for
people
. One of them is increasing the financial burden for everyone, especially the poor or students.
In addition
, increasing the
cost
 of
petrol
 not only raises the price of commodities, but it
also
 puts pressure on inflation, decreasing the competitiveness of goods manufactured in the country.
Instead
 of raising
petrol
 prices, the government can give many other methods.
For instance
, exploring alternative fuels that can replace gasoline, would not cause emissions.
Furthermore
, they
also
 can find many ways to encourage
people
 to use public transportation.
Besides
 that, governments should prioritize adding more public bikes like Japanese, or Korean use, which would restrict private vehicles but
also
 increase the state budget, and protect the environment. It is crucial that they invest in upgrading road systems and establishing urban rail and bus networks, rather than resorting to increasing
petrol
 prices. All in all, I still think that increasing the
cost
 of
petrol
 isn't the best method as it can bring a lot of
problems
. Better measures should be taken by governments and individuals
such
 as exploring new fuels, using public transportation, and upgrading road systems for solving these
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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