The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overwight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

Nowadays, the total amount of individuals who are in trouble because of obesity is increasing. In
this
essay, I will explore the causes of
this
unhealthy problem, and share possible solutions.
Firstly
, I will consider to results of fast-food culture and irregular eating
habits
, and
secondly
, I will explain how governments and
sports
clubs decrease the number of
this
issue. First of all, in
this
modern world, people do not have adequate time to cook healthy meals because of
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tired after their long working hours.
As a result
, they prefer to order foods which are fast food.
On the other hand
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habits
of folks’ are changing, and they are evolving
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irregular types. These situations cause
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obesity and being overweight.
For instance
,
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some studies, fast-food culture has been changing the society’s eating
habits
day-to-day, and it has been resulting
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overweight problems. A viable solution for
this
issue would be that
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the governments should decline the taxes
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healthy products which are from green foods to
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or zero.
Therefore
, manufacturers can produce more healthy foods for
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.
Moreover
, some
sports
clubs should encourage to play
sports
via some competitions which prize the winner and every participant.
For example
, a
sports
club in my city Ankara organises a running competition every year, and it can be clearly seen from their database that, the number of overweight people in Ankara has been decreasing
due to
this
competition. In conclusion, there are some issues,
such
as fast-food culture and irregular eating
habits
, that cause
the
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obesity. Felling taxes for healthy meals and encouraging people to
sports
may be possible solutions for
this
problem.
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