The diagram below shows the process of making a violin by hand. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making a violin by hand.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above diagram illustrates the
process
of making a
violin
by hand. The
process
starts from scratch and delivers us the final product [
violin
]. The
process
of making a
violin
involves 9 main steps. All these steps
uses
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man power
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and
does
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not require the help of machines. Each step requires different materials and
equipments
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equipment
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to arrive at the final product.
Thin
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A thin
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piece of wood is taken and
cutted
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in
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the shape
violen
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violent
viola
(body of
violin
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the violin
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)
Then
the back
part
and the
front
part
which
was
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were
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cutted
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cut
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in the previous step
is
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coated and polished.
Then
with the help of a cutting tool, f-hole is cut in the
front
part
. In the next stage bass bar is glued to the
front
part
of the
violin
. The unshaped rib strips are shaped with the help of
heating
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the heating
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tool.
Then
the
front
part
, ribs and back
part
are glued together. The neck with the scroll is connected to the body of the body of the
violin
. The assembled
violin
is polished with varnish, and additional parts are added.
This
completes the
process
of making, a
violin
. Now the completed
violin
can be tuned and played.
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