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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

#languages #english #spanish #mandarin #fear #minority #countries #steps #practice
As with the development of society, nowadays, people have increasing availability concerned about the means of communication.
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languages
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challenges to maintain their worth utilizing both glocally and globally. It’s argued that people need many measures to protect
minority
languages
. In
this
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to consider
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this more
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more
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 carefully about
this
 problem. No one can deny the fact that
values
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 of expanding
languages
 of more
domiant
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dominant
 groups in the age of globalization
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 a crucial role in many fields of community. Using popular
languages
 not only creates
opportunites
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opportunities
 to
integate
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integrate
 and develop
country’s
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 economy but
also
promote
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promotes
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culture
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 exchanges within countries.
For example
, English become more widely spoken around the world,so It helps English speakers
will
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have more chances to grow
on
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 their
job
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 and approach world civilization easily.
Apart from
this
, another aspect is that there are several benefits to
protect
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minority
languages
. Preserving the language of a community is the most important
measures
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 to protect
tranditional
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the traditional
 cultures of
nation
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a nation
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 because language is the
mean
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means
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 to retransmit National
Hisroric
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rhetoric
 most accurately. In Vietnam, there are 54 ethnic
minorites
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minorities
 with their own
languages
and so
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Its
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increase
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increases
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 diversity within
national
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 culture. In conclusion, every language has
their
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 own value
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community
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the community
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, so making
effort
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an effort
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 to retain
minority
languages
, is really necessary to preserve
cultural
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the cultural
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 richness of the world.
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