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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others t.hink women are suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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In major ,
country
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countrymen
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men
 play a vital role in government
jobs
 , police and military
force
. Numerous people believe that
women
 are equally eligible to
men
, but few of them refuse to accept that and they say that they are only eligible for their own
jobs
 ( like, cooking, washing, take caring
their
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for their
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 kids, family and husband) Let us discuss
this
 in the upcoming paragraph. In the beginning , there are various reasons that
women
 are rejected in the police and military
force
 . The first reason is their physical perspective, it is true that
women
 are more vulnerable than
men
 in the same age groups since
women
 have less strength, menstrual period, and emotional features. Though it is true there are lots of drawbacks like family and kids.
On the other hand
, some of them are open-minded, followed by
this
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apply
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they
alow
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allow
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 their children, siblings and wife to pursue their dreams , their mindset will
be
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is that
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 all
men
 and
women
 are equal . the people who grew up in
this
 kind of background will be a great motivation. the
women
 have a support to take their career. they have the freedom to perform in the policy and military
force
. by the
way
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,way
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 there are no
jobs
 that
women
. Even though it is a house job both of them should split equally. In my point of view , nowadays most ladies are giving their best to achieve something in some field,
likewise
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,likewise
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 the people are increasing in the police and military
force
jobs
 . So,I would rather die for my nation than live.
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