The presented illustration of the line graph provides the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
The presented illustration of the line graph provides the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
As can be seen, Pavilion and Pier attractions increased,
while
Art
Correct article usage
the Art
gallery
and Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
Festival
Fix the agreement mistake
festivals
reduced
to the end of Add a missing verb
were reduced
period
.
It is interesting to note that Add an article
the period
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
had
reached Unnecessary verb
apply
highest
point in 1995 Correct pronoun usage
its highest
that
is almost twice as much. But it fell to almost 30% throughout the time. Correct pronoun usage
which
Moreover
Pier used to be the lowest in the beginning. From 1980 to 2000 it was wavely but in Add a comma
,Moreover
last
10 years rapidly rose for two time.
In contrast
, Art gallery
dramatically climbed and Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
also
dramatically decreased in first
10 years. From 1995 to 2010 it rapidly declined and Correct article usage
the first
this
was the biggest change. Meanwhile Festival
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the Festival
had
started with Unnecessary verb
apply
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
persent
but did not Correct your spelling
per cent
present
rose
or fell just remained the same.Wrong verb form
rise
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