The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
bar
charts represent information about people
who born
in and outside Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
. The first bar
chart gives information about people
born in 1995. It is shown in chart
that more Add an article
the chart
people
born
in cities and rural Add a missing verb
are born
areas
outside Australia
compare
to Wrong verb form
compared
inside
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the inside
whereas
yellow
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the yellow
bar
represent
more Change the verb form
represents
people
born in town
inside Correct article usage
the town
Australia
rather than outside.
The second graph represent
Change the verb form
represents
birth
Add an article
the birth
a birth
rate
of
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for
year
2010. It is evident from Change the article
the year
bar
chart that Correct article usage
the bar
birth
Correct article usage
the birth
rate
in cities very high compare
to town and rural Wrong verb form
compared
areas
both inside and outside Australia
. Also
, people
born in towns and rural areas
are equal in Australia
and outside its terratory
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territory
birth
rate
in rural areas
is very low.
From two
charts, we can see that Correct article usage
the two
birth
Correct article usage
the birth
rate
increase
in cities from 1995 to 2010 Replace the word
increased
whereas
birth
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the birth
rate
significantly decrease
in rural Wrong verb form
decreased
areas
as it lower
Wrong verb form
lowered
down
from 30 to less than 20 inside Rephrase
apply
Australia
and 40 to approximately 5 outside its region. The birth
rate
in towns also
degrade
over the years.Wrong verb form
degraded
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