The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
bar
charts represent information about
people
who
born
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were born
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in and outside
Australia
. The first
bar
chart gives information about
people
born in 1995. It is shown in
chart
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the chart
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that more
people
born
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are born
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in cities and rural
areas
outside
Australia
compare
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compared
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to
inside
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the inside
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whereas
yellow
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the yellow
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bar
represent
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represents
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more
people
born in
town
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the town
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inside
Australia
rather than outside. The second graph
represent
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represents
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birth
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the birth
a birth
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rate
of
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for
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year
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the year
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2010. It is evident from
bar
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the bar
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chart that
birth
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the birth
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rate
in cities very high
compare
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compared
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to town and rural
areas
both inside and outside
Australia
.
Also
,
people
born in towns and rural
areas
are equal in
Australia
and outside its
terratory
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territory
birth
rate
in rural
areas
is very low. From
two
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the two
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charts, we can see that
birth
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the birth
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rate
increase
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increased
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in cities from 1995 to 2010
whereas
birth
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the birth
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rate
significantly
decrease
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decreased
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in rural
areas
as it
lower
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lowered
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down
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apply
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from 30 to less than 20 inside
Australia
and 40 to approximately 5 outside its region. The
birth
rate
in towns
also
degrade
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degraded
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over the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, people, australia, areas, birth, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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