The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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people
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were born
Australia
. The first Use synonyms
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people
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chart
that more Add an article
the chart
people
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born
in cities and rural Add a missing verb
are born
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Australia
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compare
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compared
inside
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the inside
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yellow
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the yellow
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more Change the verb form
represents
people
born in Use synonyms
town
inside Correct article usage
the town
Australia
rather than outside.
The second graph Use synonyms
represent
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represents
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birth
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the birth
a birth
rate
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of
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the bar
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birth
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the birth
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compare
to town and rural Wrong verb form
compared
areas
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Australia
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people
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areas
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territory
birth
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rate
in rural Use synonyms
areas
is very low.
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the two
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birth
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the birth
rate
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increase
in cities from 1995 to 2010 Replace the word
increased
whereas
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birth
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the birth
rate
significantly Use synonyms
decrease
in rural Wrong verb form
decreased
areas
as it Use synonyms
lower
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lowered
down
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apply
Australia
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birth
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rate
in towns Use synonyms
also
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degrade
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degraded
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