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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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The bar chart illustrates, the
percentage
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 of world illiteracy in 6 regions(developed
countries
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 -Latin Americans/Caribbean - East
Asia
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/Oceania - Sub-Saharan Africa - Arab States and South
Asia
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), divided by gender( male-female) in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, South
Asia
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of illiteracy in the world,
while
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 developed
countries
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 had less.
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, women had the highest rates in the world. In terms of women, we can separate the figure into two groups, lowest and highest rates. The highest rates contain three
countries
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 (South
Asia
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- Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa) that
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 was around (57% - 52% and 48% respectively).
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 the lowest
countries
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 were (developed
countries
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 - Latin Caribbean and East
Asia
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/ Oceania) that
percentage
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 was around (2% - 12% and 20% respectively).
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, the illiteracy
percentage
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 of men fluctuated between 1% and 35%. And like women, the highest rate was around (35% for South
Asia
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 - 31% for Sub-Saharan Africa and 28% for Arab States).
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, the lowest rate was around
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(1% for developed
countries
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- 8% for East
Asia
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/ Oceania, and 10% for Latin Caribbean and East
Asia
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).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, countries, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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