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You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my thoughts about an article you
have
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published in
you
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your
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last
 magazine. You mentioned that there is too much traffic in my town because public transportation does not function well.
That is
 absolutely wrong! I do not understand how you came up with that. You are an internationally recognized magazine and your readers believe what you share with them without any doubt. When you share
such
an information
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 like that it
just
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 not affect your reputation but
also
 impacts the view
my
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of my
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 town negatively. In your next
magazine
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magazine,
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 you should publish an article about how you made a mistake about my town.
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task response
Your response addresses the task but lacks specific details and explanations. You need to provide more accurate information and elaborate on the incorrect information in the article.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing need to be more formal and appropriate for a letter to the editor of an international magazine. Use proper salutations and closings to enhance formality.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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