The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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the graph below presents information relating to statistics on the percentage of international students in different Canadian universities in 2001 and 2006
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all of the schools rose after 5
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starting in 2001. And New Brunswick was the highest with 7% in 2001 and 12% in 2006
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Ontario was the lowest
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Manitoba and Newfoundland and Labrador universities were the same in both two
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with 3.5% in 2001 and 6.5% in 2006. Ontario was lower with 3% in 2001 and 6% after 5
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. The proportion of Alberta was 4.9%
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the figure for British Columbia was slightly lower, at 4.8%. But in 2006, British Columbia outweighed Alberta with 10.5%.
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while
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, Alberta was only 7.5%. Nova Scotia was 6.5% and Quebec chased close with 6% in 2001. after 5
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, two schools had longer distances with 10.5% in Nova Scotia and 8% in Quebec schools.
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