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the charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The display chart
show
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 the proportion of
the
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energy produced from different sources in
the a
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the
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 country between 1985 and 2003. The data contain
oil
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,
nature
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natural
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gas
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, coal, nuclear,
hydro
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 and other renewable. The changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. In the year 1985,
oil
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 is 1%, coal is 4%, natural
gas
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 is 22%, nuclear is 8%,
hydro
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 is 13% and other renewable is 52%. In the year 2003,
oil
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 is 4%, natural
gas
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 is 4%, coal is 8%, nuclear is 22%,
hydro
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 is 23% and other renewable is 39%. There are 6 types of sources in a country. The information is from 1985 and 2003.
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, the above information describes the percentage of
oil
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, natural
gas
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, nuclear,
hydro
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as well
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as
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and
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 other renewable. The energy produced from different resources in a nation in 1985 and 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, gas, hydro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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