The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts illustrate the median percentages
in
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different food types of nutrients which
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unhealthy if consumed frequently in the USA.
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, it can be clearly seen that dinner
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the highest role in
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elements
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breakfast
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for the ingredients. Dinner is more dominant than other aspects which accounted for 43%
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Sodium
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and 37%
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Saturated
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Fat respectively.
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, in Added
Sugar
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, dinner is the
upper-socond
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upper-second
class which got 23 per
cents
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and the highest meal goes to snacks which remained for almost a half percentage. Snacks
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use standard ingredients
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Sodium
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, Fat, and
Sugar
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which
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29%, 26% and 19%
subsequently
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.
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, the lowest behaviour comes from breakfast which was people
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rarely ate
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, Saturated Fat, and Added
Sugar
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at all times. For Saturated fat and added
sugar
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, the composition of the percentage was the same, which is 16%,
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in
Sodium
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the usage was so little which was under a one-fourth percentage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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