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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations.

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A lot of university students live with their families,
while
 the rest live away from
home
 on account of their universities being in separate places.
This
 matter has several merits and demerits in both circumstances. I will explain
further
 my reasons. On the one hand, if you have the opportunity to live with your parent during the period of your studies is very convenient from all points of view. One merit was, that many students enjoy the benefit of
home
-cooked meals, which can be healthier and more economical than eating out or cooking for oneself.
For instance
, in my first semester when I was studying in Greece I was too bored to cook every day and I preferred to order food which was unhealthy and I was spending a lot of money. Meanwhile, one demerit was, that living at
home
 may limit a student's sense of independence and personal growth.
On the other hand
, living with your parents has a lot of pros and cons in multiple matters,
whereas
 living in a different place away from your family is more challenging in the aspect of maturity and autonomy.
Additionally
, living on or near campus can provide a focused environment for studying and participating in campus activities.
Otherwise
 living away from
home
 can be more expensive
due to
 rent, utilities, and other living expenses. In conclusion, the decision to live with family or away from
home
 during university depends on individual preferences, financial circumstances, and the specific goals and needs of each student. Some students may choose to experience both options during their academic journey if they have the opportunity.
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Ensure that you clearly address all aspects of the prompt and provide a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of both living with family and living away from home. Use more specific examples to support your points.
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