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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
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The table reveals the count of distinct
australian
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 families who spent their life under poor financial conditions in the year 1999.
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,
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the ratio
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 of aged couples was
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 among all households whether it was totally opposite for the sole parents.
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, the proportion of
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single aged
person
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people
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 and
couple
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couples
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 with no children
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also
 stands with
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 poverty line. In the year 1999, 7 per cent of partners without children suffered from
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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