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Some people think that secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects; but others believe that it is a waste of their valuable study time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In an international age, some people have believed that multinational news should be a
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. And yet other adults have thought that
students
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 should spend more
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 on their academic learning .
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, in my essay, I will discuss these two views and give my own opinions. On the one hand, the biggest benefit of multinational reports becoming a
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 in secondary
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 is that it could help teenagers expand their kens. To be specific,
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 might help them gain various knowledge from different countries.
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, young people could develop their international vision.
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,
students
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 could learn some theories of other
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 by reading and studying global messages ,
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 as history, geography,
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,
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 encourages teenagers to use various methods and different aspects to analyze questions.
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, many opponents argue that studying
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global data to become a
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 is unnecessary, and it wastes
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 to
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 other main
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. They believe that teenagers who
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 in secondary
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 should spend more
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 on their professional
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, rather than studying the global data. Because these main
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 supply the most basic
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 and skills for
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a
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professional development.
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 as mathematics, science and social studies. In my opinion, for
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’ development
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 the future, studying international statements should
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 a
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 it might create more stress and occupies
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time
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 learning other
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. In conclusion, young people will have an international vision by studying the news from every country.
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, it has a better effect on
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 development, and yet it could occupy more
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 I think that creating a
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 about studying the news is very important.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global awareness
  • Critical thinking
  • Global citizenship
  • Cultural diversity
  • Communication skills
  • Historical context
  • World affairs
  • Academic subjects
  • Bias
  • Misinformation
  • Age-appropriate
  • Media literacy
  • Educational enrichment
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