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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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This
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number
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 of travelling to and from the United Kingdom (
UK
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) between 1979 and 1999, and the bar graph, which illustrates the states which were preferred most by
British
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 individuals in 1999. A good starting point would be to say that, the total amount of visits to and from the
UK
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 increased significantly over the years shown. Meanwhile, France was the most popular choice for holiday for
UK
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 citizens. The first result worth pointing out is that
,
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 the
number
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 of
British
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 natives who visited different countries doubled between 1979 and the
endings
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 of
1980s
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the 1980s
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 – which was more than 10
million
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 slightly in 1979. In the following years, the
amount
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 of tourists who were
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 experienced a considerable increase; it started
from
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 nearly 20
million
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people
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 in around 1986, and it finished the competition with approximately 53
million
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 individuals in 1999.
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who went to the
UK
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 was nearly 10
million
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 and approximately 30
million
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 in 1979 and 1999, respectively. Another piece of information that can be observed is that
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 France, which was preferred by more than 10
million
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British
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people
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 in 1999, led the pack
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 competition of choices.
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, Spain followed France’s placement with approximately 10
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, whilst the
number
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 of
the
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people
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, who were from the
UK
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 and went to the United States of America (USA), Greece and Turkey, was approximately 4
million
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people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, british, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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