There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are some people who argue that children will succeed academically more

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if non-academic

subjects

will be

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removed from a

school

program in order to give them

chance

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to concentrate more on studying. In my

opinion

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this

is not

good

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idea since young people will not benefit from limiting

school

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to academic work only.

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of

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difficult

subjects

in

school

brings negative

effect

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on children's health. Spending long hours

by

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constantly sitting at

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desk is harmful, especially for younger kids, who

physiologycally

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physiologically

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are not supposed to stay still and it is important for them to be active during the day. In

additon

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addition

, non-academic

subjects

,

such

as

phyical

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physical

education and cookery, can be considered as rest

time

for older students, where they get a chance to rest from learning and spend

time

on getting new skills.

School

time

, as

time

in general, is limited and there is a lot of pressure on young people to succeed academically,

hence

it is expected to dedicate most of it to academic

subjects

. In

this

way

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teachers have more

time

to explain the

subjects

and students can concentrate on improving their

knowledges

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.

However

, over-concentration on hard topics increases stress and tiredness levels, which can lead to developing serious health issues,

such

as depression and chronic anxiety.

Therefore

, focusing on the academic part of

school

education requires careful building of

school

program

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. In conclusion, non-academic

subjects

are not less important

rather

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than

academic

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academics

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and support the health and fitness level. Staying fit and physically active and learning new skills

such

as cooking or

carpentey

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carpentry

carpenter

, is crucial and beneficial for children.