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The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in percentage of market share represented by three forms.

The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in percentage of market share represented by three forms.
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 line graph illustrates the expenditure on 3 types of film watching through a 7-year period. The pie charts show the market share proportions from 3 forms between 2005 and 2011.
Overall
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, for the line graph, we can see that all types of expenditure had increased trends.
Moreover
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, the main proportion for pie graphs was on Rent a
DVD
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. Focusing on the line graph, Cinema ticket was the most spent of all types starting from 9
pounds
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 in 2005 to 14
pounds
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 in 2011. Moving to the Legal download, despite facing the decreased trend until 2007, the cost rose to 9
pounds
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 in 2011. There was an upward trend for the
DVD
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 which grew from 6
pounds
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 to 8
pounds
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 in 2011. For the pie graphs, there was a significant growth in Watch Online from 6% to 26% over these 7 years.
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, the percentages for Rent a
DVD
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 and Go to
cinema
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Cinema
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 have decreased a lot from 64% to 56% and 30% to 18% for Rent a
DVD
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 and Watch
online
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Online
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dvd, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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