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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 used for various purposes in six areas of the world.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the usage of
water
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 throughout the given
countries
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 is divided into three segmentations which are industrial purpose, agricultural need, and domestic operation.
Although
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 the
overall
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 highest percentage of
water
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 used is for agricultural needs, there are two exceptional
countries
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 primarily consuming
water
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 for industrial purposes. Regarding the amount of
water
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 used in six
countries
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 in the world, in terms of agricultural needs, the most country consuming
water
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 is in Central
Asia
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 with 88%
water
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use
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 followed by Africa at slightly 4% lower and South East
Asia
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 at about 7% lower than the former.
On the other hand
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, domestic operation is the least in
water
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 consumption around 7%-19% proportion from all
countries
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. Both Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 have a similar 7% percentage in
water
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use
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.
Moreover
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, industrial
use
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 has become the second-largest
water
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use
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 in six areas of the world.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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