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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world,
individuals
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 try to learn one more language than
mother
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their mother
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 tongue to end up with their aims.
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,
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 some
people
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 think
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 only can lead to
increase
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an increase
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 in job and
study
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 opportunities for
individuals
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, others believe that
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 can have more benefits. I personally will illustrate my agreement with the second idea. In
this
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 era, thanks to technology, there is an intense inclination among countries to attract elites for
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 and
study
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 purposes from all over the world.
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, youngsters can
work
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 for any company or
study
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 at any university that they want.
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, the ability to verbal and written communication with colleagues in
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work place
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workplace
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 or professors and classmates at universities is essential for
individuals
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 in a foreign country.
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,
people
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 who are
enthusiast
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 to achieve one of the mentioned objects have to master the native dialect
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of
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destination
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the destination
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 country. In my opinion, being mastered in a foreign language not only helps
people
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to
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gain great opportunities to/
for
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apply
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work
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 or
study
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 abroad but
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it
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has some other advantages.
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 with, there are some
individuals
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 who are interested in
culture
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the culture
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 of other nations because of their curiosity, they try to learn
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the tongue
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 of
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the considered
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 country.
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, my wife's niece is a big fan of Japanese animations and
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this
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reason
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,reason
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 she is trying to learn Japanese these days.
In addition
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,
people
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 who
are
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 worked in passenger tours, hotels,
airports
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and airports
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 as
receptionist
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receptionists
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 and taxi
driver
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drivers
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 are always confronted with foreigners.
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, it should be better that they at least master in one or so international languages
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 as English.
To sum up
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, in our own time,
individuals
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in
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all over the world can learn new dialects
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 to their mother tongue in order to
work
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 or
study
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 overseas. They
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 can travel to different countries as
tourist
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tourists
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 and familiar with
culture
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the culture
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 and lifestyle of other nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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