Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subject that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Some people argue that it is better for
students
to
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pursuit
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their
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subjects
,
while
others believe that
students
should learn useful
subjects
for their future at universities.
Although
, there are good arguments about the second view, I
personally
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in
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of
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view. On the one hand, in some industrial countries,
students
who graduated from fields related
with
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science and technology have a big chance to
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in lucrative jobs.
Therefore
, individuals who
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the mentioned
subjects
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will have a more convenient life without financial problems.
For instance
, in my country, Iran, parents prefer that their children major in medical fields or engineering because their career will guarantee in the future.
Thus
, the majority of the youth in my country have to study
subjects
at universities that they may not
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about
those
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.
On the other hand
,
students
who select their discipline freely are passionate about university courses and activities.
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high level of concentration and enjoyment of reading will
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with
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of individuals' innovation and creativity.
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, people who are involved in
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jobs related to their
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have better performance than others.
For example
, my wife has really liked art since she was a kid, but, his parents insisted that she must
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one of the medical fields,
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which
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she
never
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interested
in
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. Unfortunately, she
never
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successful neither medical nor art.
To sum up
,
although
a group of people think that it would be better
to
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youngsters studied in science and technology without
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to choose, I believe that
students
should select majors based on their
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,
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because it leads to
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the flourish
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flourish
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their
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talents and
creativities
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.
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