Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

It is clear that
participation in social voluntary
activities
is enjoyable for everyone. Part of
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think
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that humanitarian
activities
must be included in
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curriculum compulsorily.
Although
attending
in
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such
activities
leads to some advantages for students, I personally believe that
this
should not be obligatory in school courses. On the
on
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hand, students can achieve some benefits by taking part in unpaid social actions.
Firstly
, they will promote their skills and be more aware of what occurs around them.
For instance
, youngsters who
they
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help others to build a home for deprived individuals will
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familiar with problems in their neighborhoods.
Secondly
, school girls and boys will learn and teach some environmental issues.
For example
, children by
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planting trees or collecting
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non-biodegradable
rubbish in their vicinity during their free time can be a good role
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for current and subsequent generations.
On the other hand
, experiences show that restriction and compulsion on children not only reach to
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result, but
also
lead to more obstinacy in them.
In addition
, if children have to do projects without any wage, they will presumably become
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during their adulthood.
Therefore
, it is better to teach the pupils what the benefits of
this
type of
activities
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are and
then
allow them to have an optional
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in
this
case.
Thus
, all of the participants who work for charity and other similar un-paid
activities
are more passionate and full of motivation and
as a result
, everything will go beyond expectations in
this
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.
To sum up
,
while
some individuals think schools have to force pupils to do some unsalaried social actions, in my opinion, individuals should have elective
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for doing
such
activities
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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