The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
era of modern technology
science
's vital objective must be
development
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the development
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of
people
's
lives
. I completely agree with
this
statement as
science
upgraded
human's
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human
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well-being, essential products, finding
alternation
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alternative
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living
place
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places
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, and
continously
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continuously
working on
pollution
control.
Besides
these
Science
working
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works
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on marine
life
, wild
life
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wildlife
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sending rockets and
satelites
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satellites
to space which
are
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do
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not directly
impacts
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impact
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on
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apply
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people
's
lives
. Without
advancement
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the advancement
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of
science
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,science
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we can not even think of our daily communication, medical products, less
pollution
, and second
home
outside of the planet
earth
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Earth
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. Every morning,
first
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the first
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thing we do is check our
moblie
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mobile
phone
. Mobile
phone
is
the
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an
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essential part of our daily
life
. From
phone
call
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calls
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to
work
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working
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from
home
, friends and family
bondings
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bond with
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everything we do via mobile
phone
. Now,
people
do not carry cash anymore
the
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they
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prefer online payment or digital
wallet
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wallets
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. Even though some mobile
phone
has the feature that we can measure your heart rate,
blood
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and blood
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pressure through mobile applications. In the context of medical improvements,
science
today
saving
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saves
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milions
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millions
of
people
's
life
through the
upgradution
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upgradation
of
the
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apply
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well-being. How human
lives
face
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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situation. Many
people
died from
this
virus. With the blessings of
science
human
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apply
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kind
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humankind
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found vaccination and the death rate by
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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decrased
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decreased
tremendously. So that
people
of
eart
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Earth
can live properly
science
are now looking for better place like
Moon
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the Moon
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or Mars. Everyday
Science
are
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is
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exprementing
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experimenting
on different things so that
people
can find their new
home
besides
earth. As
pollution
is one of the biggest
problem
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problems
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in
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on
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the
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apply
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earth,
science
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are
also
working on how to control
pollution
. Now
people
have electric
car
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cars
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so that
by
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diesel or petrol can not pollute the air.
Science
is not only for human mankind but
also
for others.
Science
is working on marine
life
, astronomy,
wild
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wildlife
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life
and so on. If
science
do
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does
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not balance the
sea
life
people
won't find any
sea food
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seafood
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. General
people
do not know which creature from the
sea
should eat or not. They
also
do not know what amount of species they should catch from the
sea
.
Science
everyday
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every day
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reseaches
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researches
research
on these things.
Science
also
trying to create balance
upon
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in
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wild
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wildlife
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life
. Not only that, but
also
science
reseached
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research
researched
on Moon, and Sun, and other
plantes
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plants
. If
science
do
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does
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not give
this
knowlege
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knowledge
of
low
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the low
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tide
sea
we may not save our
lives
from the
sea
. On the basis of
above
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discussion,
science
always
emphais on
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emphasises
human
lives
first,
by developing the medical sector, essential product sector,
pollution
and second
home
. At the same time
science
has
also
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analysed
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analysing
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analysed
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other
lives
to improve, control and balance all
lives
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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