The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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era of modern technology

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well-being, essential products, finding

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we can not even think of our daily communication, medical products, less

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outside of the planet

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everything we do via mobile

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do not carry cash anymore

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prefer online payment or digital

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has the feature that we can measure your heart rate,

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pressure through mobile applications. In the context of medical improvements,

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today

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through the

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well-being. How human

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face

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situation. Many

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died from

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virus. With the blessings of

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are now looking for better place like

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or Mars. Everyday

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working on how to control

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have electric

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diesel or petrol can not pollute the air.

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is not only for human mankind but

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for others.

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and so on. If

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do not know which creature from the

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should eat or not. They

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everyday

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reseaches

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trying to create balance

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knowledge

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we may not save our

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discussion,

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emphasises

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by developing the medical sector, essential product sector,

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to improve, control and balance all

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

435 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
enhancing quality of life
improvement of healthcare
transportation
communication
agriculture
energy sectors
eradication of diseases
prolongation of life expectancy
global challenges
climate change
overpopulation
food security
developed world
underprivileged communities

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