The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The pie charts depict the primary cause of migration to and from the UK in 2007.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the Linking Words
reason
for immigration in the definite job had the highest proportion of people , Use synonyms
while
for no Linking Words
reason
lowest. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
reason
for emigration had the biggest percentage
of the public who are at the definite job, Use synonyms
whereas
the formal study smallest.
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To begin
with ,definite jobs in immigration, accounted for 30 % which is twice as much as accompanying and joining (15%). The figure for looking for work had roughly similar proportions to others, namely
12% and 11% respectively. The formal study was over 4 times bigger than people with no Linking Words
reason
.
Use synonyms
However
, it was the most unpopular Linking Words
reason
over the period in question.
With regards to emigration, in terms of looking for work, it accounted for 22 % , Use synonyms
whereas
accompany and join only 13 %. The figure for formal study was over three times smaller than others. Linking Words
However
,
the rate of definite jobs was approximately 29 % which is higher than no Linking Words
reason
stated ( 18 %).Use synonyms
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