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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

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The line graph and pie chart illustrate the number of migrants and how long they stay in the United Kingdom.
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, it gives the reason for migration from 2000 to 2008.
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, most of the foreigners stayed up to 2
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 and many of them came for work purposes.
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, the given line graph provides information about the duration of stay from 2000 to 2008. A proportion of people started their journey in 2001, which accounted for 150. They rapidly increased in 2004, which was 250 people and it was stable after four
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. 150 folks stayed for 4 or more
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, they were at 150 thousand throughout the
years
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. The least number of them left after 4
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, the ratio was continuously the same for 7
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 and there was
gradual
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 improvement to 100 in the year of 2008. When looking at the pie chart, it displays a large number of foreigners coming for work at 38%, followed by study at 32%. The next set of migrants arrived for Accompany at 16%. The
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 two bunches of immigrants
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 as other and no reason stated at 7% each in the year of 2008.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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