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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.
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The line graph and pie chart illustrate the number of migrants and how long they stay in the United Kingdom.
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, it gives the reason for migration from 2000 to 2008.
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, most of the foreigners stayed up to 2
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 and many of them came for work purposes.
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, the given line graph provides information about the duration of stay from 2000 to 2008. A proportion of people started their journey in 2001, which accounted for 150. They rapidly increased in 2004, which was 250 people and it was stable after four
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. 150 folks stayed for 4 or more
years
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, they were at 150 thousand throughout the
years
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. The least number of them left after 4
years
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, the ratio was continuously the same for 7
years
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 and there was
gradual
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 improvement to 100 in the year of 2008. When looking at the pie chart, it displays a large number of foreigners coming for work at 38%, followed by study at 32%. The next set of migrants arrived for Accompany at 16%. The
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 two bunches of immigrants
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 as other and no reason stated at 7% each in the year of 2008.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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