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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented diagram depicts the changes which took place in the floor plan of a mutual library 20 years ago and in the present. As is observed, all segments of the library have dramatically changed
since
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from
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 20 years ago until now, only with the exception of the entrance. To commence with the western part of the map, CDs,videos and computer games have
completely
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 removed and replaced by storytelling events,two sizable sofas and children's fiction
books
.
moreover
, adult fantasy
books
 have been displaced by all reference ones. Not only the
books
 but
also
 the reading room given its place to the computers. The most remarkable
alter
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 happens to the middle part ,which includes the tables and chairs ,
that
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which
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was abolished after 20 years.
Furthermore
, in the eastern part both children,
adult
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and adult
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 non-fiction
books
 were changed by the lecture room and adult fiction booklet respectively.Not only
they
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did they
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 change but
also
 an information desk with self-service machines was added next to booklets. In a similar fashion, the enquiry desk was replaced by
Cafe
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a Cafe
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.The only chunk that didn't change at all was the entrance.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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