The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the
oil
production. There are several stages of making
oil
, from picking olives by the farmers to the distribution stage.
Moreover
, 7 stages in the production of the product have been illustrated.
The first step is
that the trees are grown by workers, and
then
are peaked to the special rinsing maschine. After the rinsing stage, where plants are combined with the cold water, they are put on the belt and smashed. The end products, which are the olive paste
as well as
olive stones,
goes
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to the bags with holes.  In order to make proper olive
oil
, these bags are pressed by special equipment. Having been left in
this
separating machine, they are
consequently
 filtered from the water. In the end,
oil
is packed in jars for distribution and selling.  The finished product is delivered to the storage and sold to the markets and other companies, which is the
last
stage of production.
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