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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the
oil
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 production. There are several stages of making
oil
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, from picking olives by the farmers to the distribution stage.
Moreover
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, 7 stages in the production of the product have been illustrated.
The first step is
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 that the trees are grown by workers, and
then
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 are peaked to the special rinsing maschine. After the rinsing stage, where plants are combined with the cold water, they are put on the belt and smashed. The end products, which are the olive paste
as well as
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 olive stones,
goes
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 to the bags with holes.  In order to make proper olive
oil
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, these bags are pressed by special equipment. Having been left in
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 separating machine, they are
consequently
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 filtered from the water. In the end,
oil
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 is packed in jars for distribution and selling.  The finished product is delivered to the storage and sold to the markets and other companies, which is the
last
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 stage of production.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting - the process of collecting ripe fruits, such as olives, from trees.
  • Rinsing - washing thoroughly with water to clean away debris or impurities.
  • Crushing - smashing or grinding something into small pieces or a paste.
  • Paste - a thick, soft mixture formed by crushing olives.
  • Pressing - the act of applying force to extract liquid.
  • Centrifuge - a machine that separates substances of different densities by spinning them rapidly.
  • Filtering - the process of removing impurities or unwanted particles from a liquid.
  • Bottling - packaging liquid in bottles for storage or sale.
  • Impurities - unwanted or foreign substances within a mixture.
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